Searria H.

Very interesting. I liked the first two sentences. They really captured my attention. Claustrophobia takes hold; I imagine a geriatric mass operating as a single entity, closing around me, gripping ...

Okay. Interesting start, but it was a little on the short side. Prologues don't have to have a specific length, but you didn't give quite enough information for me to ...

I can't believe nobody has reviewed this yetQ! Very capturing! You mention that her fingers are thin and pale a little too much. Just once or twice is fine. :D ...

If you didn't want us to correct your grammar or the poem, why did you post it? :? It would have been nice if you separated this into lines. It ...

Interesting poem. I found it rather funny, but also a tad bit sad. I get on to people a lot for this, but you don't have a stable rhyming pattern. ...

This poem was very well-written and beautiful. I agree with kokobeans about those two lines. I would like to give you a suggestion, but I don't want it to ruin ...

First of all, you need to do two reviews before you post anything of your own, then keep a 2 to 1 ratio. The more reviews you do, the more ...

Nice poem. I'm not much of a poetry writer myself, but we had to do a lot of it in school once. Go on! Say you goodbyes! your I can ...

Do you really hate math that much? :wink: :lol: Very nice piece, really sad. For the first time in my life I feel alone like every one is gone. "every ...

Yaay! I finally got time to read this. I was dying all week waiting. Hoorayy! You put your dialogue in quotations this time! Good for you. Sureal has already mentioned ...

It's a nice little story, but it seemed like a bunch of descriptions. The descriptions were excellent, but as Mikedb1492 said, it didn't have any action. The boy walked most ...

Wow. Sorry this took so long, but life's been hectic! Okay. I really liked this chapter, and it didn't seem to incomplete to me. Everyone has already pointed out the ...

I thought that this was a good poem. It kept its rythym and For the most part, its rhyming pattern. I agree with Fellow on the fact that the title ...

I'm not sure if this is what you were going for, but I thought it was sort of cute. I know what it's like to have to babysit your three-year-old ...

I had to read this a couple of times before I understood it. I think I get it now. Perhaps this should be in Narrative poetry. I'm not really sure. ...